Blake Allyn
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Just looking for some feedback for a song I wrote, link is below. Negative or positive comments welcome!! Really just want criticism to improve. Thanks in advance.
It takes elbow grease. Keep working it man.Thats great advice and I appreciate you taking the time to write it.
I have been trying, I just cant quite get the chords for the hook yet. But you are right its a crucial misisng piece and my diction sucks.
You saying you like it?no. no. no. take that shit down to the front lines of the resistance. just no. try to just clearly speak what you believe. it works well.
I appreciate the feedback. Maybe I'll try and shorten the harmonica part up. My diction sucks!I thought the harmonica intro was way too long. By the time the singing started I was getting bored and ready to just turn it off.
I can't speak to the lyrics because I couldn't understand a word you sang. Your words are very muddled and muddy. Try singing a bit louder and more clearly.
Otherwise, it sounded very folky and might go over well performed live at political rallies, but I wouldn't count on getting a record deal or appearing on the late night talk shows with it.